Get a pop filter or something, I hear your breath effecting the mic
your acting is bad, none of the characters sold me with their voice.
the music is too loud when the focus should be the voice acting
just a make an audio submission for voice acting demo's, this was just.. It honestly didnt really add anything to the voice demo.
I find badly done "lol so randum XD" humor unfunny and this was just cringy